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The graph shows the percentage of 15 year olds with low literacy (reading and writing) levels in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of 15 year olds with low literacy (reading and writing) levels in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays the proportion of
15 years old
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15-year-olds
 with low
literacy
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 skills in four countries from 2000 to 2009. In summary,
Denmark
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 faced the highest increase,
while
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Ireland
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 improved
literacy
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 rates during the period.
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 the beginning, in 2000, Austria and
Ireland
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 started with approximately 15% of students having low
literacy
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,
whereas
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Denmark
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 had about 10% and Sweden slightly less. **
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**, by 2003,
Denmark
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's percentage had overtaken Austria's, rising steadily to reach nearly 25% by 2009. Austria’s percentage fluctuated but remained around 15% throughout the period.
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, Sweden experienced a gradual rise from around 10% in 2000 to about 20% in 2009.
On the other hand
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,
Ireland
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 saw a decline in the percentage of students with low
literacy
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, dropping from around 15% in 2000 to just under 10% by 2009.
Overall
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,
Denmark
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 experienced the most significant increase,
while
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 Austria and Sweden showed relatively stable trends.
In contrast
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,
Ireland
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 demonstrated a downward trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, denmark, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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