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The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 maps illustrate the development and the changes
of
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in
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 Seaville between 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, There were significant changes at the right
side
 of the
road
 running inland to
seaside
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the seaside
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 from 1980 to 2010.
Besides
, a golf course has been constructed
instead
 of Woodland.
Moreover
, Marsh and
holiday
cottages
 have been transformed
to
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into
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 permanent houses.
In addition
, a large hotel has been constructed to the
sea
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seaside
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side
. The village has become a
touristic
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tourist
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 place for
the
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apply
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visitors.
Furthermore
, a new
road
 and a bridge have been completed over the river on the right
side
. There were woodland, marsh,
holiday
cottages
 and a little hotel on the left
side
 of the
road
 running to
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the sea
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sea
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seaside
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side
.
additionally
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additionally,
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 there were tea rooms
nearby
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near
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 the sand dooms in 1980. Woodland has been demolished and a golf course has been constructed
instead
 of it.
Additionally
,
permenent
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permanent
 houses
replaced
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were replaced
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 by
the
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apply
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marsh and
holiday
cottages
. On the right
side
 of the
road
, a retirement village has been built.
Moreover
, tea rooms
has
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have
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 been replaced by a hotel and restaurant near the
sea
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seaside
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side
. There has been a significant change on the East Bank and a new
road
 which is running over the river has been
build
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built
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.
Furthermore
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 a new
brdige
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bridge
 has been built over the river.
In addition
, new
holiday
cottages
 have been built
at
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on
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 the East bank.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, furthermore, in addition, instead, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road, holiday, cottages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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