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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The displayed chart illustrates the share of
households
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 for some owned and rented household accommodations in two countries ( England and Wales) from 1918 to 2011. As an
overall
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 trend, the proportion of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 was greater than the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 during the first half of the timeline. The maximum
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 was in 2011 and the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 remained the lowest.
However
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, the largest
percentage
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 of
households
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 for rented
accommodation
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 was 1918
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
households
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 for owned
accommodation
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 was the minimum.
Additionally
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,
households
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 in both owned and rented
accommodation
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 had the same proportion in 1971. In 1918,
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 were approximately 23%. It developed to almost 32% in 1939 and 1953, it was constant.
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, it improved significantly from about 32% to 69% between 1939 and 2001.
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, it slightly dropped to about 64% in 2011. As far as
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 were concerned, 1918 was the boom year with nearly 78% which started to drop
afterward
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. Though it remained constant at around 68% between 1939 and 1953, it continued to go down and reached only 30% in 2001. In the year 2011, it slightly increased to around 36%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • accommodation
  • trend
  • shift
  • households
  • homeownership
  • economic and social circumstances
  • interwar period
  • post-World War II
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • public policy
  • economic prosperity
  • tipping point
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