The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual. Manual occupation includes Craft or similar, General labourers and other manua

The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual. Manual occupation includes Craft or similar, General labourers and other manua
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These
two
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pie charts are divided based on the sex of the employee. Both pies are split into
two
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different portions of categories - manual and non-manual. These
two
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categories are
also
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divided into different types of works. Abstractly, these
two
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charts demonstrate the
work
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held by a male or female in 1992. Female workers in 1992 were preferring non-manual
work
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as the percentage was 69% of the total employment.
In contrast
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, male workers were somehow in the middle of choosing the type of
work
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as the percentage was around 52% for manual
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. Males with non-manual
occupation
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occupations
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tend to
work
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in managerial
atmosphere
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with a rate of 36% of the total manual, and non-manual
occupation
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occupations
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,
whereas
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, the percentage of professional
work
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done by females was 29% of the
overall
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occupation proportions.
On the other hand
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, men did craft jobs
in
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an intensive rate which took 24%, and only 2% for general labour.
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, women who worked in craft were very low compared to men with a rate of 3%, and the general labour for females only formed 1%. For both males
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and females, other manual occupations took
around
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up around
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26%-27%
from
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of
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the whole occupations list.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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