The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the average change in the
price
of
copper
, nickel and
zinc
for each month threw 2014.
Overall
, we can see that the nickel was by far the highest percentage change at the beginning of the
year
but ended as the lowest
one
of the three
at the end
of the
year
.
While
,
zinc
started the
year
with the lowest percentage change,
although
it ended at the highest point.
Copper
prices had a limited range of variation. In January the
price
of
nickle
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nickel
was up six per
cent
, but by the middle of the
year
in June it dropped to negative 3,
finally
copper
ended the
year
with a
one
per
cent
rise.
Copper
started with a two per
cent
increase and the
price
started dropping for the next six months to reach slightly below negative
one
per
cent
.
However
, the
price
rose in the second half of the
year
ending at a little below two per
cent
.
Zinc
started at
one
per
cent
in January
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and rose
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a little to reach two per
cent
in the next month
then
it started to reduce slowly until June reached negative
one
and continued the next four months with limited movement,
Zinc
ended the
last
quarter of the
year
with a slight increase reached 2 per
cent
as the highest
one
of the three.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc, year, one, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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  • month-on-month
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