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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the average change in the
price
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 of
copper
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, nickel and
zinc
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 for each month threw 2014.
Overall
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, we can see that the nickel was by far the highest percentage change at the beginning of the
year
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 but ended as the lowest
one
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 of the three
at the end
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 of the
year
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.
While
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,
zinc
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 started the
year
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 with the lowest percentage change,
although
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 it ended at the highest point.
Copper
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 prices had a limited range of variation. In January the
price
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 of
nickle
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nickel
 was up six per
cent
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, but by the middle of the
year
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 in June it dropped to negative 3,
finally
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copper
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 ended the
year
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 with a
one
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 per
cent
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 rise.
Copper
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 started with a two per
cent
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 increase and the
price
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 started dropping for the next six months to reach slightly below negative
one
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 per
cent
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.
However
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, the
price
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 rose in the second half of the
year
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 ending at a little below two per
cent
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.
Zinc
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 started at
one
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 per
cent
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 in January
raised
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and rose
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 a little to reach two per
cent
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 in the next month
then
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 it started to reduce slowly until June reached negative
one
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 and continued the next four months with limited movement,
Zinc
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 ended the
last
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 quarter of the
year
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 with a slight increase reached 2 per
cent
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 as the highest
one
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 of the three.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc, year, one, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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