You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Both the line graph and pie chart illustrate different data on
crime
in England threw the
last
year.
Overall
, we can see that young people the
age
of 20 had the highest number of crimes which is 80 thousand crimes in the
last
12 months.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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violent
crime
took the first place with a significant percentage almost half. At the
age
of 8 and 12, there were almost 8000 crimes, The numbers dramatically increased for the people of 12 to 16 to become 70 thousand until reaching 80000 at the
age
of 20,
then
numbers started to rapidly fall and reached 8000 again for the
age
of 60.
Due to
the pie chart, We can say
the
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that
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violent
crime
was about 46 per cent of the types and property
crime
was exactly half of it with
the
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a
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percentage of 23 slightly below it was drug
crime
, Public order
crime
was the
last
on the list with only 9 per cent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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