Students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet. While the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement ?
In today's modern world,
internet
plays Add an article
the internet
important
role in human life Correct article usage
an important
that
is an undeniable fact. Should we realize the advantages of using Correct pronoun usage
which
internet
correctly in Add an article
the internet
children
future progress, we ponder over Change noun form
children's
effects
of using Correct article usage
the effects
internet
on Correct article usage
the internet
children
future much more scrupulously. but some parents think that using Change noun form
children's
internet
by Add an article
the internet
students
can have negative
influence on Add an article
a negative
children
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children's
education
and they believe that they must limit using of internet
for their Add an article
the internet
child
. In their Fix the agreement mistake
children
opinion
their child can only Add a comma
opinion,
use
internet
freely when reach Add an article
the internet
certain
age of adulthood.
effects of using Add an article
a certain
internet
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the internet
has
currently been the topic of Change the verb form
have
debating
among many researchers. but is it really harmful for pupils to Replace the word
debate
use
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the internet
internet
? it is Capitalize word
Internet
controversial
issue and Add an article
a controversial
for answering
it, we must refer to Change preposition
to answer
researchers
findings about Change noun form
researchers'
researcher's
this
issue.
I do believe that,
controlled Remove the comma
apply
using
of Replace the word
use
internet
, will not only Correct article usage
the internet
has
not bad Change the verb form
have
impacts
on Fix the agreement mistake
impact
children
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children's
education
but also
can be very handy for them, and these are my justifications. To begin
with, internet
provides access to a wealth of Add an article
the internet
refrenced
sources and information, Correct your spelling
referenced
reference
as well as
, common information from around the globe. For example
in my country there are several websites that supported
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are supported
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the ministry
ministry
of Capitalize word
Ministry
education
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students
can find more about their lessons and can
access Verb problem
apply
to
online libraries. The second reason why advocate Change preposition
apply
this
point of view lies in the fact that,
it allows Remove the comma
apply
peoples
(i.e. Fix the agreement mistake
people
students
with different races and cultures, with different languages and with any education
level) around world
to Add an article
the world
conect
and Correct your spelling
connect
exchanges
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exchange
the
ideas Correct article usage
apply
with
together and Change preposition
apply
discusses
about Correct subject-verb agreement
discuss
sciencesubjects
. so Correct your spelling
scientific subjects
students
and teachers can improve their experiences and their level of informations
.
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information
pieces of information
On the contrary
side,There is no doubt that,
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apply
misuse
of Correct article usage
the misuse
this
invention through
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by
students
, leads affect
them badly. Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
some times
, using new technologies Correct your spelling
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are
sweet for many of us Change the verb form
is
that
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addiction
. I strongly can say, Change preposition
to addiction
internet
is one of these technologies. Add an article
the internet
For
example
nowadays most Add a comma
example,
of
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apply
students
in use
of
social media are Change preposition
apply
indulge
.
In conclusion, I have to say, Wrong verb form
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the
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that the
internet
can be both helpful and hindering to people of all ages. In my opinion
we can not disregard Add a comma
opinion,
this
invention because of some of its disadvantages. instead
parents can allow Add a comma
instead,
students
to use
internet
in handy and controlled ways and profit from its positive aspects.Add an article
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