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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or a college lecture.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or a college lecture.
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The provided bar chart indicates the
number
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 of
hours
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 worked weekly.
Moreover
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, the supplied pie chart illustrates the percentage of concern which individuals suffer in some
jobs
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. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
number
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 of working
hours
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 is for
business men
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businessmen
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.
However
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,
lecturers
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 do not work a lot compared to other
jobs
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 in a week.
Furthermore
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, the highest percentage of
stress
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 is for
lecturers
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. Whilst, writers do not suffer from the
stress
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 of
job
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a job
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 as much as others. The average
number
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 of
hours
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 worked as a business
men
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man
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 is 70
hours
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, (which is the highest
number
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 of work
hours
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 between other
jobs
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) compared to the time of work for movie producers with 60
hours
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 weekly.
Similarly
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, the amount of
stress
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 for
lecturers
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 is considerably more than
movie
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for movie
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 producers at 25% and 18%, respectively. (Which are the highest percentage of suffering from worrying compared
other
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to other
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jobs
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).
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of job
hours
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 for chefs is 30
hours
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, (which is the least
number
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 of
hours
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 worked over the period) just ahead of
lecturers
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 with roughly 25
hours
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 per week.
Following
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this
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, working as a writer is as stressful as working as a programmer with 8% and 5%, respectively. (Which are the lowest amount of
stress
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 which is related to job between other occupations).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, jobs, lecturers, stress with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average hours worked
  • stress levels
  • professional groups
  • correlation
  • highest/lowest
  • reported
  • variations
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
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