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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The line graph illustrates information about the average
price
changes
 of three
kind
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 of metals (Copper, Nickel, and Zinc) from January to December 2014.
Overall
, the
change
 in value of Nickel and Copper decreased,
while
 Zinc’s
price
changes
 experienced
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growth throughout the given period.
Moreover
, the
price
 gap between
three
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 metals narrowed by the end of 2014. In terms of metal with the highest value
changes
 in the first period, Nickel accounted for 6%. The
change
 in
price
then
 experienced a dramatic decrease to 1% in March before falling gradually and hitting the through at -3% in June. In the second half of 2014, it experienced a fluctuation followed by a moderate growth to 1% in Nov and remained at the same level until the end of the period.
On the other hand
, the
change
 in the value of Copper made up 2% in Jan before dropping gradually to just below 0% in June. The figure
then
 increased steadily
at
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 just below 2% in December. The remaining metal, Zinc, had a 1%
price
change
 in January. Zinc’s
price
changes
then
 experienced
a
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significant growth and peaked at 3% in February, before falling gradually in June. The figure remained steady over five months, followed by a dramatic rise to 2% in December. By the end of 2014, Zinc had the highest level of
price
changes
 compared to other metals.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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