The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram compares the portion of foreign students in
Canada
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Canadian
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provinces between 2001 and 2006. It divides several provinces in Canada namely, New
Brunswick
, Nova Scotia,
Quebec
,
Alberta
, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, and
Ontario
. In 2001, the significant majority
is
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was
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New
Brunswick
aorund
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around
7%,
while
Nova Scotia and
Quebec
almost
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were almost
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7%.
Moreover
,
Alberta
and British
Coumbia
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Columbia
have the same level of percentage around 4 per cent.
In addition
, Manitoba
and
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apply
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Newfoundland and Labrador, and
Ontario
have the lowest percentage nearly 3%. In 2006, New
Brunswick
reach
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reached
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the highest
foreign
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number of foreign
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graduates 13%
in
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2006.
However
, there are universities
demonstrate
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that demonstrate
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the
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similar percentages
in
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of
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11 per cent,
such
as Nova
scotia
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Scotia
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and British Columbia, at the same time
Quebec
and
Alberta
approximately
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have approximately
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7%.
Although
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,
Quebec
and
Alberta
have
the
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slight differences
about
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0.01.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
Ontario
remain in the lowest majority of foreign
stuents
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students
.
Overall
, international
graduate
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graduates
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2006
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in 2006
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has
higher
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a higher
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percentage than
2001
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in 2001
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in all
Canadia
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Canadian
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universities. The biggest portion is
Brunswick
in 2001 and 2006.
However
, the smallest portion is
Ontario
for 2001 and 2006.
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