You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Hello Maria, It's been a long

time

since we've talked. How is Malaysia there? Is it comfortable or is it noisy? But as long as you can enjoy it I'm sure I will be able to enjoy it too later on. I am planning on studying

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Taylor's

university

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University

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while

doing a

part

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part-time

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time

job

. If you could whenever you have

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some

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free

time

, I want you to do a

favor

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for me to find a suitable

part

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part-time

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time

job

to help my parents pay for my tuition college. I need a

job

that is

related to art so I

could

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still develop my skills in art

while

working and the ones that have

high

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salary of course. I've heard that you are

also

in a

part

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time

job

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If it

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also

involves in some kind of art either in sculpting, decorating, baking, drawing, or sketching but I cannot do literature well. I need a salary

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that at

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least earns me 100$ a week. I know

this

might sound too much to

fulfill

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but even if you didn't find one

that is

ideally what I want, I still appreciate you

try

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to help me. Just a heads up, there is going to be a concert

your

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favorite

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band in Jakarta and I've bought two tickets for us, it's 2 months later but I hope we can have some together. Your dearest friend, Keisya

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task achievement

You have included all the key task points, but you could provide more specific details about your study plans and exactly what type of art-related job you are looking for.

coherence cohesion

Consider organizing the letter into clearer paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. This will make your letter easier to read and understand.

suitable writing tone

Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.

greeting and closing

You included a greeting and a closing, which adds to the overall structure of the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

233 words

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