The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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about
Sodioum
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sodium
(S) , Saturated fat (
SF
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) Added sugar (AS) in
usuall
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usual
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meals in a day
that
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and
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which of them
are
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going to be
unhealtier
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unhealthier
healthier
than others. In all three
categories
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breakfast has the fewest
percent
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per cent
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of bad nutrients in S is 14% but in
two
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other
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others
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is 16
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per cent
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. After breakfast, snacks
is
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are
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lowest
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the lowest
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with 14% in S and 21% in
SF
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,
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however
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; the amount of AS in snacks
were
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the most. By
measurment
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measurement
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that
have
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been done dinner is one of the biggest use of S with 43% and
SF
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by
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37%.
This
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amoung
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amount
in AS is not close to others by 23% which is fewer. In
lunch
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the lunch
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category
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all of
nutrients
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the nutrients
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are likely
toghether
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together
in order to S BY 29%,
SF
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BY 26% and AD by 19% which is in the middle. In
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bottem
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bottom
line
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the most unhealthy nutrients
is
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S and
SF
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in dinner
meal
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meals
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and AD in snacks.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sf with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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