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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The visuals illustrate information about sodium (S) , Saturated fat (
SF
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) Added sugar (AS) in usual meals in a day and which of them is going to be unhealthier than others. In all three categories, breakfast has the
fewest per cent
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lowest percentage
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 of bad nutrients in S is 14% but in the two others is 16 per cent. After breakfast, snacks are the lowest with 14% in S and 21% in
SF
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,
however
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; the amount of AS in snacks is the most. By measurement that has been done dinner is one of the biggest use of S with 43% and
SF
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 with 37%.
This
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 amount in AS is not close to others by 23% which is fewer. In the lunch category, all of the nutrients are likely together in order to S BY 29%,
SF
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 BY 26% and AD by 19% which is in the middle. In
bottom
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the bottom
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 line, the most unhealthy nutrients are S and
SF
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 in dinner meals and AD in snacks.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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