The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is an argument that social burden should not be applied to commerces because their main purpose is gaining profit. I personally disagree with

this

statement

in particular

for big

companies

,

however

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I will elaborate more on

this

essay.

Firstly

, businesses need to operate their production by hiring local

labors

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. As they produce huge

amount

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amounts

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of money from the

locals'

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area, they need to hire local people to participate as workers in the company. Owing to

this

, the

companies

will contribute to

increase

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the locals' economic level.

For example

, in Indonesia, the government applied a policy that

companies

should hire at least 30% of local people,

otherwise

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they could not afford

an

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official permission to operate their production in certain areas.

As a result

, the commerces are not only profit-oriented, but they

also

help locals to improve their life quality.

Secondly

, businesses usually utilize local resources in order to generate their practices. As some

companies

need natural resources,

such

as land and trees, to make their products, it will affect

to

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sustainability qualities in the

long-term

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.

Therefore

, they should aware of the environmental damages that might

be happen

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in the future.

For instance

, a big company called More had a waste processor in order to reduce the garbage from its production. By preparing

this

technology,

this

company is not only making money, but it

also

helps

keeping

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the environment clean. In conclusion, commerces

are

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not solely aim to make

profit

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a profit

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in their practices, but they should have social responsibilities in terms of local

labors

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labourers

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hiring and providing modern technology to prevent natural

damages

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damage

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.