Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Children
nowadays want to focus on multiple
subjects
rather than only studying their major
course
. Some student argues that they should be given opportunities to learn other
subjects
also
.
However
, other
says
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their complete focus should be limited to their major
course
. In my opinion,
children
should
study
other things
also
along with
their main
subjects
as it
multiple
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benefits when it comes to their
career
.
Children
now are more
hard working
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and more focused
to
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their
career
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careers
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. So, It is a good option if they
study
extra courses
also
. It can help them to gain knowledge about other topics
also
.
Moreover
, If they get
interest
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in that
subject
, they can
also
easily move
in
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into
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that particular
subject
and choose it as
career
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a career
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. So, It can act as
backup
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a backup
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for students. To illustrate, In my boards, I elected both math
as well as
biology and studied both as my parents wanted me to become a doctor but I found math more interesting. So, I
then
choose
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math and made my
career
in Engineering.
This
is how studying more
subjects
can help you to
give
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multiple options to choose as a
career
.
On the contrary
, It is
also
seen that when student
study
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studies
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other
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another course
other courses
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course
with their main
course
, they
give
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pay
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less attention to their main
subject
and they lack
in
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knowledge. It leads to issues like getting failed in
exam
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exams
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and
also
not getting proper jobs for
better
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a better
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future.
For example
, my friend in Engineering was studying administration
subject
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subjects
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more than IT
subjects
and he
got
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failed
in
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an
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exam. He got rejected from many interviews because of
this
reason. So, when
children
study
other
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another subject
other subjects
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subject
with major topics,
this
problem usually occurs.
To conclude
, I would say that students should
study
other courses
also
with main
subjects
as it increases their knowledge and
also
add
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a backup corresponding to
career
.
However
, they need to manage it and should give more time to
main
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the main
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subject
.
Submitted by anash.suhail on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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