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The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent

The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent
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The bar chart compares the proportion of females and males in numerous
age
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 categories who frequently did exercises in Australia in 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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women
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 who did regular physical activity had the highest percentage in all
age
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 groups. The figures showed that exercises are popular among
youth
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young
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men
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 more than
women
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. Meanwhile, people who are over 65 in both sexes had a similar number. Looking in more detail, males from the 15-24
age
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 group were doing workouts more than females, with 52.8% and 47.7%, respectively, which is the highest percentage for
men
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 in the chart. The proportions for the 25 to 34 and 35 to 44
age
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 groups are similar, as declined for the
men
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 with 42.2%,
then
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 dropped
further
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 to 39.5%,
while
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 the figures for
women
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 increased, accounting for 48.9%, and rose
further
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, reaching 52.5%. The percentage of people who frequently did workouts among ages 45 to 64 was relatively similar, accounting for 53% for
women
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 and 43% to 45% for
men
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.
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, both genders over 65 years old did
equally
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equal
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 physical activities, comprising 47%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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