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The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line chart illustrates Americans and their companions,
which
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with
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they
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whom they
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 spend
time
with
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apply
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. It's evident from the graph that as the
american
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American
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 person
get
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gets
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 older and
reach
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reaches
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 the
eighten
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eight
, it is preferred to be alone for long
hours
.
According to
 what
shown
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is shown
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 there is a significant difference between
american
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Americans
 and with who spend their
time
with among
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of
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the
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apply
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various set of ages.
Begin
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Beginning
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 with
children
, allocating
time
 with
children
 increased highly till
age
 40, as
american
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Americans
American
age
 the
time
 they used to invest
it
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apply
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with their
children
is
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apply
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diminished.
Also
,
american
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Americans
 from an early
age
as
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apply
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tweenty
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are
they
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apply
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accustomed to
have
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spending
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 more
time
 with their family, over 4
hours
,
as well as
 with their friends, the
time
 is more than 2
hours
.
However
,
this
time
get
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gets
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fewer
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less
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 as they grow older,
while
 they start to have additional
time
 with
partner
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their partner
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 reaching 5
hours
. For workers
american
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apply
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from
young
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a young
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age
 the
time
 they
have it
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spend
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 with their coworkers is ongoing increasing,
as
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and as
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 they attain
to
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apply
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50 years it
initiate
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 to drop down.
To sum up
, we could say that,
american
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Americans
 at a young
age
send
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spend
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 their
time
friends
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with friends
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 and family, for
the
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apply
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middle
age
 they spend
the
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apply
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more
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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time
 with
children
. At the sixty and above more amount of
time
spended
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spend
expended
 with their partner.
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