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The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line chart illustrates Americans and their companions,
which
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with
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they
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whom they
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 spend
time
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with
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apply
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. It's evident from the graph that as the
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american
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American
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 person
get
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gets
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 older and
reach
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reaches
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 the
eighten
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eight
, it is preferred to be alone for long
hours
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.
According to
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 what
shown
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 there is a significant difference between
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american
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Americans
 and with who spend their
time
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with among
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of
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the
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apply
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various set of ages.
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 with
children
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, allocating
time
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 with
children
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 increased highly till
age
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 40, as
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american
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Americans
American
age
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 the
time
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 they used to invest
it
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apply
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with their
children
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is
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diminished.
Also
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,
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american
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Americans
 from an early
age
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as
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apply
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tweenty
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are
they
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apply
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accustomed to
have
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spending
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 more
time
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 with their family, over 4
hours
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,
as well as
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 with their friends, the
time
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 is more than 2
hours
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.
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,
this
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time
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get
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gets
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fewer
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less
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 as they grow older,
while
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 they start to have additional
time
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 with
partner
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their partner
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 reaching 5
hours
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. For workers
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american
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apply
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from
young
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a young
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age
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 the
time
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 they
have it
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spend
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 with their coworkers is ongoing increasing,
as
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and as
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 they attain
to
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apply
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50 years it
initiate
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initiates
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 to drop down.
To sum up
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, we could say that,
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american
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Americans
 at a young
age
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send
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spend
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 their
time
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friends
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with friends
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 and family, for
the
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apply
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middle
age
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 they spend
the
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apply
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more
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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time
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 with
children
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. At the sixty and above more amount of
time
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spended
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spend
expended
 with their partner.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, american, hours, children, age with synonyms.
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