Task1: The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports to four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task1: The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports to four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportions of Australian
export
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exports
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to 4 different countries between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
,
although
China
and
India
had
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a forward
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trend in 22
years
old
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apply
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period,
US
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the US
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and
Japan
declined in these
years
. In 5
years
following 1995,
while
Japan
with
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around
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26%
share
and
US
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the US
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with around 12%
share
decline
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declined
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rapidly to 20% and around 8% respectively,
China
rose smoothly from near zero to 3%
share
and
India
remained steadily at around 2%. In the following next 5
years
,
however
US started to
rose
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increase
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its proportion other countries had the same previous period pattern. In 2005,
while
China
rose significantly in the next 5
years
, from just over 10% to 25%,
US
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the US
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fell its percentage like its pattern in the
5-yearold
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5-year old
past period.
India
rose its
share
gradually
5
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from 5
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% to around 7% and
Japan
approximately unchanged. Between 2010 and 2012,
while
India
declined slightly,
US
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the US
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and
China
increased their
share
gradually.
Japan
had the same pattern which it had before.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, years, japan, share with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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