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You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need explain how you will keep up-to-date while you’re away suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Mr. Stika,
How
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 you know every year me and my family travel to
the
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Europe
because
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for
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of
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a of
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 lot personal reasons.
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 my daughter
she
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has to pass the test
from
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in
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 her native language and
also
 we have to visit our doctors and sort
it
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out our new passports to extend our
visa
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.
Nevertheless
, I am able to continue with my
work
 from our European branch on
the
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 daily basis and give
it
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to
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you my daily results every day.
In here
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 I want you
suggest
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 my solution
how
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for how
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 I'll
work
 during my annual leave.
Althought
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Although
 we'll be very busy and I am able to
work
 from our branch every day from 7:00 am to 4pm from Monday till Friday
also
 because of
time
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 zone I can
work
 overtime if ll come something very urgent. I hope
Mr.
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 Stika that my explanation is enough and if
do
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you need more information please don't hesitate to contact me thank you
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task achievement
Clarify the reason for the leave, and make sure to address all points concisely.
coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphs have one main idea for better readability.
suitable writing tone
Check for grammatical accuracy and use formal language.
task achievement
You have made an effort to inform your manager about your availability during your leave.
greeting and closing
The letter has a polite closing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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