The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows information about people from different types of employment in three various wage levels in
years
2009. Correct article usage
the years
Overall
, it can be seen that finance has a
highest salary among others and its minimum Change the article
the
also
really high. Meanwhile, hospitality Add a missing verb
is also
become
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becomes
sector
with Add an article
a sector
lowest
maximum and construction be Correct article usage
the lowest
a
least minimum. Change the article
the
In addition
, the average was around 1895 until 5225 euro
.
Firstly
, finance has a big wage with total
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a total
8850
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of 8850
euro
, Fix the agreement mistake
euros
while
its minimum was 1600. Aditionally
, the average was 5225. On the other Correct your spelling
Additionally
sides
, transportation was a sector that Fix the agreement mistake
side
has
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had
salary
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a salary
about
4580 and the minimum was 843 Change preposition
of about
euro
. Not only that, but Fix the agreement mistake
euros
also
the average as
much as 2712 Add a missing verb
is as
euro
. Fix the agreement mistake
euros
Besides
, construction's
workers Change noun form
construction
has
Change the verb form
have
income
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an income
approximately
3100 Change preposition
of approximately
euro
as well as
the
minimum Correct article usage
a
was
790. Wrong verb form
is
Besides
that, the average was 1945.
Furthermore
, manufacturing's
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manufacturing
staffs
can Fix the agreement mistake
staff
earning
up to 3500 Change the verb form
earn
be earning
euro
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euros
also
the minimum was 930. Not forget
to Verb problem
apply
be mentioned
, the average was still high until Wrong verb form
mention
reach
2215 Wrong verb form
reached
euro
. Fix the agreement mistake
euros
Last
job, people who work in hospitality can gain revenue at 2900 Change the article
The last
euro
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euros
along with
its minimum in
which 890. Even, the average was big at 1895 Change preposition
apply
euro
.Fix the agreement mistake
euros
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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