The table illustrates the proportion of people aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and the UK in 1988, 2000 and an estimation of 2030.

The table illustrates the proportion of people aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and the UK in 1988, 2000 and an estimation of 2030.
The chart shows the proportion of individuals from the age of 65 and over in some nations, Canada,
Germany
and Britain from 1988 until 2000 and estimated for 2030.
Overall
, for all years it seems that percentages increased, and
Germany
has the highest
rate
compared to them, and Britain has the lowest
rate
, Canada and
Germany
have a steady increase at a
rate
of 5% for the three years. Begin with Candad which was 16% in 1988 and it increased by 5 percentage points in 2000 to become 21% and
also
will go up 5 in 2030 and become 26%, the same thing with
Germany
,
however
, it starts at 20% in 1988 and raised to 25% in 2000 it probably will be 30% in 2030
Moreover
, the UK shows the lowest
rate
in percentages, starting at 14% in 1988 and increasing by 1% in 2000 to become 15%
however
in 2030 it is expected to be 20%
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