The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the amount of money that folks from five employment sectors earned, in three different
salary
levels (maximum, minimum ,and average) in 2009. Overall
, it can be seen that the finance in maximum salary
was the highest amount of money while
the manufacturing in minimum salary
was the least
Correct word choice
lowest
salary
.
To begin
with, finance was the largest wage in maximum and the average from all other employment sectors which was around 8850 and 5225 pounds respectively. Also
, the second highest salary
was the transportation in maximum levels at 4580 pounds.
On the other hand
, the construction was the few wages in minimum levels at 790 pounds. In addition
to that, the second least money was transportation at 843.Submitted by maha.wed on
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