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The most essential component of a person’s life is his or her time at the workplace, and life turns meaningless once no job satisfaction is obtained. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#component #person’s #life #time #workplace #job #satisfaction
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Some
people
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 argue the most essential thing
of
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 an individual's
life
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 is his or her time in the
workplace
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, and
life
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become
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 meaningless if
job
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satisfaction
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 is not achieved. I completely agree with
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 viewpoint because
job
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satisfaction
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 is one of the main goals that should be fulfilled and a
person
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's wellbeing depends on
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.
Job
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satisfaction
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 should be fulfilled because
people
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 do not
work
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 only for money. If someone is not satisfied with his
job
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, he will not get any interest
to go
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 to his
workplace
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. There are numerous things
are
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associated with
job
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satisfaction
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,
such
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 as a
freindly
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friendly
 working environment, professional achievement, and safety in the
workplace
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. All these should be achieved to make an employee satisfied with his
job
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.
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, in the USA,
people
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 generally apply for those jobs which provide them not only a good salary
,
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 but
also
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 proper
job
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satisfaction
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.
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, an employee's mental and physical
wellbeing
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well-being
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are
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 related
with
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to
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 his
job
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satisfaction
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. Those employees who are not satisfied with their jobs, cannot enjoy their lives properly. All
time
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the time
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 they are
in
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a
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stress
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 about their performance level, toxic
work
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 environment, and unwelcoming
manager
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managers
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 and colleagues.
Life
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 does not have any meaning to them because they cannot enjoy their
work
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, and they only
work
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 for survival.
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 affects their mental and physical
wellbeing
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,
consequently
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, they sustain several complications in their body.
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,
people
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 in India, suffer from heart problems and anxiety issues only because of
the
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workplace
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 stress. In conclusion,
job
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satisfaction
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 provides a
person
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 with a happy and satisfied
life
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. A
person
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's
wellbeing
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well-being
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 is
also
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 associated with it,
therefore
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 of a
person
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 is very important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • component
  • workplace
  • job satisfaction
  • meaningless
  • extent
  • agree
  • disagree
  • significant
  • crucial
  • purposeless
  • factors
  • contribute
  • balancing
  • personal life
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