The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph illustrates the proportion of
population
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the population
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,
number
of people born and
number
of people
die
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who die
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in million in England and
Walves
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Wales
between 1700 and 2000.
To begin
with, In 1700 the
residents
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resident's
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number
was
alomst
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almost
2
millions
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million
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, after 5 years the
number
increased and reached
at
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10
millions
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million
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. After a decade the population
number
almost come
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is
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close to again 2
millions
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million
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.
Moreover
, after 1800 the
number
of people in England and
Walves
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Wales
rosed
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rose
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significantly and hit its peak
number
50
millions
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million
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in 2000. Meanwhile, the birth
rate
was 30
millions
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million
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in 1700 and it reflects little
increased
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in 1750 by 10
millions
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million
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and it was steady through 1750 and 1800. After 1800 it
starts
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started
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declining and
reaches
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reached
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22
millions
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million
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in 1950. By 2000 the birth
rate
number
higher than its initial
number
.
Similarly
, the death
rate
was 26
millions
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million
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in 1700 and after 1700 it increased by almost 10 million and it was stable
it
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in
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1800. After 1800 the
number
showing
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downward
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a downward
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trend and reached
at
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20
millions
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million
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in 2000.
Overall
, the population growth shows a drastic upward trend
through out
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throughout
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the period.
However
, the birth
rate
and death
rate
was
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were
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parlle
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parallel
to each other
expect
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except
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from
last
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the last
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1 decade
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • stabilize
  • steep
  • advancements
  • notable
  • shift
  • norms
  • impact
  • critical factor
  • relatively stable
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