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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie chart indicates the proportion of
water
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 consumed for various purposes in six
regions
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 of the world.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 industrial
water
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usage
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 is the highest in North
America
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 and
Europe
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,
while
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 other
regions
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 are dominated by agricultural use.
Moreover
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, domestic
water
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usage
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 accounts for only a small percentage across all
regions
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. In general, the percentage of agricultural
water
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usage
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 is notably higher, ranging between 81% and 88% in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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.
In contrast
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, the other three areas show a more balanced distribution, with agricultural use at 39% in North
America
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, 71% in South
America
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, and 32% in
Europe
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. Focusing on domestic
water
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usage
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, the proportion of total
water
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 consumption is significantly lower than that of industrial and agricultural
usage
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. Domestic
water
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usage
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 stands at 7% in both Central
Asia
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 and South
Asia
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,
while
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 it makes up the highest percentage in South
America
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 at 19%.
Additionally
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, the remaining percentages are 13% in North
America
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, 15% in
Europe
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, and 9% in Africa.
By contrast
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, industrial
water
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usage
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 is most prominent in
Europe
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, where it reaches 53%, much higher than North
America
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’s 48%. The remaining
regions
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 show much lower levels, all below 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, regions, usage, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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