The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in UK.
The
chart
provides details about the average amount time
British teens spend chatting and playing Change preposition
of time
games
on a workday.
A close look at the chart
reveals that boys
spend slightly less time
chatting on the internet with about only 30 per cent of them spending more than an hour daily chatting and an overall
of about 55 per cent of them chatting on a daily basis. Girls
, on the other hand
, enjoy chatting daily more with about 40 of them out of a 100 that spend more than an hour chatting.
When it comes to playing console games
, the chart
illustrates a great gap between boys
and girls
with boys
having the lead. Close to 9 out 10
, Change preposition
of 10
boys
play video games
on school days, a number which differs greatly to
that of the Change preposition
from
girls
with only bearly more then
half of them playing. The distinction does not end there for the Replace the word
than
chart
shows, on average, not only more boys
spend time
playing, but they spend more time
doing so. Games
take up more than an hour in more than two-thirds of boys
lives. Change noun form
boys'
boy's
Girls
, however
, spend much less time
playing. In general, about 70 per cent of UK teens play games
on school days.Submitted by parsajahan3 on
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