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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar charts indicate the
number
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 of
students
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 who had bachelor's or master's degrees and did not tend to
work
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in
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apply
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full-time after graduation in the United Kingdom in 2008. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest percentage of graduate or postgraduate learners chose to continue
further
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 study in England.
However
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,
students
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 did not prefer to
work
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voluntary
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 in the UK over the period. In 2008, exactly 29,665
students
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 with a bachelor's degree decided to
follow
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pursue
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further
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 study in England, (which was the highest
number
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 of
students
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 over the period) compared to the
number
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 of graduated scholars who tended to
work
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 in part-time jobs with 17,735 people in 2008.
Moreover
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, doing
further
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 study by
students
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 with a master's degree was a bit as popular as working
part time
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part-time
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 in the UK in 2008 with 2,725 and 2,535, respectively.
In contrast
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, Graduate
students
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 did not prefer to
work
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 in voluntary jobs with 3500
students
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 in the UK in 2008. (Which was the least
number
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 of graduate scholars over the whole year).
Similarly
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, 345
students
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 with a master's degree chose to do voluntary
works
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work
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 in England in 2008. (Which was the lowest percentage of postgraduate learners who did not tend to
work
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 full-time over the period).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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