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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the alterations in the proportion of possessing cars families in a particular country in Europe from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
people
 who have two
car
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cars
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
 the opposite trend was for
people
 who owned no
car
.
Additionally
, when it came to the modern era, the tendency to get
one
car
 became dominating. In 1971, the percentage of
people
 who had
not
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no
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transports
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transport
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 was significant at approximately 50%,
while
 folks that had
one
 and two cars were at nearly 35% and 18%, respectively. By 1981, the percentage of no cars declined slightly by about 6% and the two-automobile
owners
 had
a
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apply
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climb
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 to 30% and
people
 with
one
car
 experienced a little fluctuation. In 1991 and 2001, the
oer
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per
 cent of no-
car
owners
 was at the same level at exactly 30%. For
one
-
car
owners
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owners,
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 it was just under 20% in 1991, but after
one
 decade it soared up to
his
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its
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 peak point at roughly 43%. The two-
car
owners
was
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were
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 at almost 20% in 1991, and it
also
 increased by exactly 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, one, owners with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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