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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the data about households with
cares'
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cares
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 changes in European
country
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countries
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.
This
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 information was reported every 10 years :
1971
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in 1971
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 , 1981, 1991,
2001
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and 2001
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 .
Overall
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 ,
car
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 ownership was
uplift
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 every 10 years.
At
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In
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 the beginning , autos were not popular , and
In
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From
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 1971 to 1991 ,
rate
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the rate
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 of citizens without
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car
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a car
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 was demanded ,
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however
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however,
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 by 2001 ,
amount
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the number of
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individuals with 1
car
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 was the highest. In 1971 ,
people
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 with no
car
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 consisted nearly 50
percent
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 , and 1
car
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owners
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owner
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 was 35
percent
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 . Two
car
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 owners
was
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were
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 approximately two times
fewers
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fewer
 than
people
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 with 1 auto. (15 %) After 10 years , citizens without
cars
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 decreased by 7 rate ,
nonetheless
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,
people
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 with 1 and 2
cars
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 had
same
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the same
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 rate with
difference
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a difference
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3
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of 3
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percent
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per cent
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.(31 and 29).
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Additionally
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 in 1991, all indicators represented the lowest gauges . In 2001,
people
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 with 1 and 2
cars
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 , uplifted by 10
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percent
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per cent
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 than in 1971,
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however
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however,
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citizens
citizents
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citizens
 without
cars
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 decreased by 20
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percent
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per cent
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overall
overal
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overall
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people, percent, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "uplift" was used 2 times.
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