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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The supplied bar graph depicts alters in the scale of families in
European
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the European
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nation
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nations
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 that have
cars
 in
period
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a period
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 of three decades.
Overall
, as data observed, the number of families which do not have any vehicles steadily decreased,
meanwhile
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 households that have
one
 or
two
cars
 fluctuated during the whole period.
Initially
, approximately half of
people
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the people
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do
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did
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 not have
a transport
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transport
a means of transport
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 in 1971,
whereas
 families with
one
 and
two
cars
 accounted
35
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for 35
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 and 28
percent
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per cent
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 respectively.
Nevertheless
, after a decade the
amount
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number
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 of residents with no
cars
 dropped to 42%,
while
other
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the other
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two
 trends showed almost the same scale, between 28 and 32 per cent. The smallest percentage of vehicle consumption
were
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was
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 in 1991. Citizens with
one
 or more
cars
 constituted about 20% and households without
cars
 decreased by more than 10
percent
.
However
, the opposite situation could be seen after 10 years in 2001. Over
than
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apply
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40
percent
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per cent
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 of individuals have at least
one
 car,
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while when
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when
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the
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 rest
two
 patterns
illustrated
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illustrate
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 30
percent
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per cent
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both
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of both
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, one, two, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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