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Some people think it w more effective for students to study in grou while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is well known that there are differences between individuals , some of them prefer doing their tasks alone
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 others like to be in a group for several reasons .
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 I will discuss both views and provide my own opinion On the one hand , the most positive role of being in a group is looking for support and boosting self-ability
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, most of the students are encouraged to stay in a group of people.
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 , being in the middle of a variety of people will enhance friendship bonds, expand knowledge, and chance to share responsibilities.
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 , some learners prefer to be alone when they are studying
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 quietness will stimulate their brains to be more focused on difficult topics .
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, they believe that will not spend plenty of time per day to achieve any tasks. cited an example , a friend who I know prefers to accomplish any job by himself ,
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 he is alone, his mindset prepared to receive anything to do weather how challenging is it.
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Ensure your essay has a clear logical structure. Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas and points of view.
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Make sure to have an introduction that sets up the essay topic clearly and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and states your opinion.
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Support your main points with more detailed and specific examples to strengthen your argument.
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Be careful with small inaccuracies and grammatical errors, as they can affect the clarity of your ideas.
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Your essay addresses both views and provides a balanced discussion.
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You have included reasons for each point of view and supported them with relevant ideas.
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Your essay flows well from one point to the next, making it easy to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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