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he diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable

he diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable
#salt #sea #water
The provided diagram gives information about how salt is removed from
sea
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seawater
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water
 and
make
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made
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it
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apply
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drinkable. There are 6 stages in the diagram, where salt
water
 is
filtred
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filtered
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 from
sea
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the sea
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 to
pre-treatment
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the pre-treatment
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 filter and
proceed
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proceeds
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 to
integrated
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the integrated
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water
 supply system.
The first step is
 that saltwater goes through a pre-treatment filter and occurs filtering,
then
filtred
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filtered
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water
 is through the membrane by high pressure, in
this
 process impurities and salt do not pass through the membrane, because their sizes are bigger than
membrane
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the membrane
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 size. After that, liquid flows to the
post treatment
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post-treatment
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 filter backwash and seawater concentrate
are
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is
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 returned to the sea.
The following step is
 that chlorine and
flouride
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fluoride
 are added
the
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to the
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water
. In the final step, the
filtred
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filtered
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water
 is placed into storage to prepare for
on
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an
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intergrated
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integrated
water
 supply system.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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