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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides information about average monthly
student
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spendings
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 in the UK in 2016. The bar graph illustrates sources of
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income
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 in 2016.
Overall
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students
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 biggest payment is their rent. The least amount of
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 spent on travel by
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.
Student
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 loans are the biggest
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 source for
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,
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 grants and funding are the smallest.  The highest amount of
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 spent on rent by
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, with 385
pounds
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. The second-largest portion
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 the monthly
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 expenditure pie chart is food.
Students
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 spent 124
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for
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 food. Following food,
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 spent 91
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 on other stuff, 69
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 on bills, and 64
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 on socializing.
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 spend the least amount of
money
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for
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 travel, which is 52
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. The biggest
income
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 sources for
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 are
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 loans, with 80 per cent. The
income
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 from family and a part-time job is similar, at approximately 65 per cent. The smallest
income
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 sources for
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 are grants and funding, followed by bank overdrafts and savings, all at under 60 per cent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, income, students, money, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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