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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart provides information about average monthly
student
spendings
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spending
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 in the UK in 2016. The bar graph illustrates sources of
student
income
 in 2016.
Overall
,
students
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students'
student's
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 biggest payment is their rent. The least amount of
money
 spent on travel by
students
.
Student
 loans are the biggest
money
 source for
students
,
while
 grants and funding are the smallest.  The highest amount of
money
 spent on rent by
students
, with 385
pounds
. The second-largest portion
on
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of
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 the monthly
student
 expenditure pie chart is food.
Students
 spent 124
pounds
for
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on
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 food. Following food,
students
 spent 91
pounds
 on other stuff, 69
pounds
 on bills, and 64
pounds
 on socializing.
Students
 spend the least amount of
money
for
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on
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 travel, which is 52
pounds
. The biggest
income
 sources for
students
 are
student
 loans, with 80 per cent. The
income
 from family and a part-time job is similar, at approximately 65 per cent. The smallest
income
 sources for
students
 are grants and funding, followed by bank overdrafts and savings, all at under 60 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, income, students, money, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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