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Some people like to work in small companies or business while others prefer working for large companies of government organizations. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a large company or organization?

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Although
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 some people would argue that working for start-ups
are
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 better than working for large institutions, others prefer to work at big and well-known companies.
This
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of working at large companies or organizations. First and foremost, there are many advantages of being part of
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 establishment
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, big firms are giving more benefits to the employees
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 as salary and better health insurance.
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, people
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works
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 for large organizations are more appealing to other institutions as they have the experience of being part of massive
firm
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 which can indicate that they have certain skills that are valuable for the work environment.
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 it
help
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 the individual in his future career.
On the other hand
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, there can be some challenges that should
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 if someone
was
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 planning to be part of
well-known
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a well-known
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 business.
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, it is harder to get promotions
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 there are many people competing against each other
for getting
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 promoted.
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addition
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 small organizations can help employees to get the most experience in
short
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 time as there are not many workers there so each employee
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 more
reposibilities
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responsibilities
 and duties and
it
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 must be executed perfectly.
To sum up
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 all the above, big companies can be good and bad, but
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 believe
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depend
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 on the point of view of the worker as mentioned there are some advantages and disadvantages and the employee should consider that and think if the large organization are the suitable solution or not.

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coherence cohesion
While the introduction and conclusion are present, they could be more impactful. Ensure that your introduction clearly sets out what will be discussed, and your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.
task achievement
Some sentences could be more concise and clear. For example, 'people that works for large organizations are more appealing' can be corrected to 'people who work for large organizations are more appealing.'
task achievement
The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of working for large companies, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The main points are well-supported with relevant examples, showing a clear understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • career advancement
  • resource availability
  • networking opportunities
  • compensation
  • fringe benefits
  • work-life balance
  • bureaucracy
  • hierarchical
  • personal impact
  • competition
  • innovation constraints
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