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Train service in your area is reduced. Write a letter to your train company - explain how it affects you - describe the situation - tell the train company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to discuss the problem,I
had
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 been facing because of
train
 service is not regular in my area. I have a full-time job in
Toronto
 and I am living in Mississauga which is 30km far and it is
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to 5 job. I have to
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update
 every day from Mississauga to
Toronto
. Before, it was very easy for me to commute there
through
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train
 because buses
take
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hours
 to
reah
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reach
Toronto
 .But, recently I
had
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have
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 seen drastic changes in
schedule
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the schedule
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 of
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the train
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train
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trains
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. In three
hours
, there is only one
train
 route going
in
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Toronto
.
Whereas
,
last
 month
train
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 was scheduled after every 30 minutes. I don't know the reason why the schedule is changed. It is
giving
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so
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me so
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 many problems
in
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 my work
hours
. Every day I have to
reach
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 the first
train
, if I miss that
train
 I have to wait for
next
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the next
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 three
hours
 . And
in
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 bus it will take two
hours
 which is only 30 minutes in tain. I am
student
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a student
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 here, I cannot afford a car, so for
me
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me,
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 public transport is the only option to go
for
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to
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 work. Even
the
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 prices of
taxi
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 is too high in Mississauga, trains are so reliable as well
asreasonable
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as reasonable
reasonable
. So, it is my humble request to change the time or to schedule
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at least
 two trains in one hour, which will be very beneficial for people like me who have only public transport to commute. Yours faithfully, Sim
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking long sentences into shorter ones for better readability and to avoid run-on sentences.
task achievement
Explain the specific problems caused by the reduced train service more clearly, such as arriving late for work or missing important meetings.
writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, suitable for the purpose of the communication.
greeting and closing
The letter opens with a clear introduction and ends with a respectful closing, ensuring the reader understands the main issue and the desired resolution.
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