The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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These graphs illustrate the employment status of young people who decided not to work a full-time job, there is a confrontation between data based on the level of study achieved. The are four categories represented: part-time work, voluntary jobs,
further
study and unemployment.
Overall
, both graduate and post-graduate students' results of the survey follow a similar trend: mainly achieved are
further
studies, whilst working for a charity is an option for the few. Diving deeper, working becomes a more consistent choice, in proportion, for people with a diploma, where it is chosen by 2,535 units in spite of 2,725 decisions of following knowledge's pursue.
Nonetheless
, graduate students prefer to continue to attend a school participating in a master's degree, with 29,665 of them choosing that alternative.
Furthermore
, we can see that a voluntary occupation has not been considered in a consistent way by any of the young generation of workers,
this
trend is confirmed by the low participation of only 3,500 graduates and 345 postgraduates. In conclusion, unfortunately, unemployment is spread in both categories considered, representing a steady average.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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