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The graph below show the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below show the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage change in the prices of
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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 on a monthly basis throughout 2014.
Overall
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, the prices of all three metals fluctuated throughout the year, showing noticeable declines in June and October.
While
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nickel
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 experienced the most dramatic
price
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 changes at the beginning of the year,
copper
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 and
zinc
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 showed more stable trends, with the gap between the metals'
price
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 changes narrowing towards the end of 2014. In January,
nickel
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 had the sharpest increase, with prices rising by approximately 6%,
whereas
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zinc
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's
price
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 only grew by 1%, making it the lowest among the three metals. By February,
zinc
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's
price
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 surged to around 2.5%, overtaking
nickel
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, which dropped significantly to the same level. From March to December,
nickel
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’s
price
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 consistently lagged behind
copper
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 and
zinc
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, reaching just 1% by the end of the year.
Copper
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,
on the other hand
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, showed less volatility than
nickel
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, staying between 0% and 3% throughout the period. After a steady decline from January to June, it
then
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 experienced minor fluctuations until the final quarter.
Zinc
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 followed a similar pattern, though it displayed more noticeable upward movements after October, eventually rising to about 3% by December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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