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The line chart illustrates the Australias exports with four different nations, from 1990 to 2012.

The line chart illustrates the Australias exports with four different nations, from 1990 to 2012.
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Overall
, we observe that, after 2000, the
exports
 with India had
rised
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raised
risen
, before that it was almost zero. In 1995, the imports made by Japan witnessed a drop after which it was almost constant.
Where as
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 in
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 of China right from the
begining
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beginning
this
 figure had grown significantly.
However
, the percentage of Australian
exports
 done with the
U.S
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U.S.
 was witnessing a fluctuation. On closer examination, it can be seen that,
untill
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until
 2005, close to 0% of
exports
 were done by Australia with India, but after that
this
 number had grown close to 7%, in 2010, later it dropped by approximately 2% points. In
case
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the case
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 of
China
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China,
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this
 number was less than 4%, after which
this
 had grown
darmatically
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dramatically
 to more than 25%, in 2012, resulting
it
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to be
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a
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the
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 country having
highest
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the highest
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 imports from Australia.
Apart from
this
, in 1990,
with
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in
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
this
 was close to 25% after which it dropped by almost 5% points by 1995, after which remained almost constant.
In addition
 to
this
, in 1990 and 2000, out of every 100rs of
exports
 done 10rs was done with U.S, but in 1995 it was less than
this
.
Moreover
, after 2000,
this
 figure dropped
as a result
, in 2010,
this
 was 5rs, and in 2012, slightly more.
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