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Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher. Following his advice, you need to write a letter to the teacher and say: •What is your motivation to learn a new language •How can the teacher help you •When you will be ready to start

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Dear Sir/Madam, I Hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my interest
to learn
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new
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 language. My name is Sam, next year I am going abroad for my higher studies. Recently I went to
met
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 my mentor, he recommended
me
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to
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learn
the
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French. In 2025, I am going to Canada
for pursuing
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to pursue
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 my higher Education in Computer and
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 city where I will be going, French is
first
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my first
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 language . As
,
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some of my friends are living in
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Montreal city, they
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 speak French there to communicate with people.
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, My mentor
discuss
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 all the details of Learning French. Because, they
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 learned French, when they went
to
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abroad. Learning
new
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a new
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 language
,
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 is
new
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a new
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 skill
by
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 itself and I am
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 willing to learn new things. I got your contact number, as my mentor said you will help me to learn it and he
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 told me your schedule is
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 flexible. I am
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 going
for
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 some other classes so, for
me
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me,
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 evening classes will be perfect. I was told about your reasonable fees and
freindly
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friendly
 behaviour. So, please let me know if you need more information, I will be happy to share . Hope to hear back soon. yours sincerely, Sim

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Grammar
Try to proofread your letters to catch minor errors such as spelling and punctuation mistakes. For instance, 'I hope' instead of 'I Hope' and 'freindly' instead of 'friendly'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Some sentences are quite long and could be separated into shorter ones for better readability. For example, 'In 2025, I am going to Canada... first language' could be split into two sentences.
Task Achievement
Make sure that each paragraph centers around a single idea to enhance coherence and cohesion. For instance, the motivation to learn French and logistical details about the schedule could be better separated.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter mostly follows a logical structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for the context, which is a key aspect of suitable writing tone.
Task Achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task: your motivation, how the teacher can help, and your availability.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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