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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.
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Firstly
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,
this
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 pie chart gives information regarding
energy
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 in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s
with in
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within
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 five categories. These are ‘Oil, Natural gas, Coal, Hydroelectric Power, Nuclear Power’.
Secondly
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, when we look at the panel Oil
has
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had
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 42% in 1980 and 33% in 1990.
According to
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panel
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the panel
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 1980s
has
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 the highest oil rate.
On the other hand
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, Natural gas has 26% in 1980 and 25% in 1990. It seems that almost
equel
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equal
.
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, Hydroelectric power and Nuclear power are virtually unchanged.
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, looking at the table again Coal
was
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increased
5
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by 5
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% in 1990.
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, the
most rising
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highest
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 rate is oil.
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, coal has a high percentage. All in all, the diagram which is above mentioned describes the sources of
energy
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 in the USA. As an extra,
this
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 chart is remark ratio
at
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of
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 sources of
energy
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. From my point of view, we see that
energy
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 resources
is
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the much rather in the USA.
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