The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts bar chart illustrates the major reasons for
study
between students of different
age
groups and the amount of
support
from
employer
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employers
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to them. When
consider
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together, the information suggests that there are some
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links
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between
it
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them
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. The majority of
reason
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reasons
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for
study base
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studying based
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on
age
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the age
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of student is under 26 around 80% because they want to achieve their career
in
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at
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the
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a
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young
age
. Meanwhile, students
which
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who
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study
for
interest
only 10%. It correlates to
the
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workplace assistance
due to
the
employer
give
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the biggest
back up
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backup
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for under 26
age
students who chase their profession
about
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at about
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60% which is the highest.
The
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employer
support
also
have
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two
association
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associations
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with the
age
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ages
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from
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26
until
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to
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29 and 30 to 39
that
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apply
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the lower of
person
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people
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who
study
for
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to
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reach their career and the higher of people who
study
for their
interest
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interests
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, the Corporate assistance become less.
However
, in the
age
of 40 to 49 and over 49, the numbers of workplace assistance
are
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not correlate with both
of
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reasons to
study
because it
have
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has
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the same percentage approximately 40%
while
the number of corporate
support
increases around 45%. But, when the reason
of
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for
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study
for
interest
touch
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touches
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70%, the
employer
support
change
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changes
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into
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to
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50%.
Overall
, the figures
suggests
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suggest
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a possible association between the number
young
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of young
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and old
age
to
study
for
interest
and career.
However
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However,
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the correlation is not consistent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, support, employer, interest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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