The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-years-old students studying a foreign language in an english speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-years-old students studying a foreign language in an english speaking country, and the top three foreign languages.

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The bar charts compare the percentages of 14-
16 year-old
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old students learning a modern foreign
language
in an
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, speaking country across two different years between 1984 and 2004. And
also
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the popularity of the top three
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studied.
Overall
, a significantly large
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portion
proportion
of girls studied a foreign
language
than that of boys in both given years. At the same time, despite a significant decrease in the study of French and German, both languages remained more
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popular
than
spanish
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Spanish
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which saw a rise in
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popularity. In 1984, nearly half of all 14-to 16-year-old female students studied a foreign
language
, compared to 30% of their male counterparts. By 2007, the figures for both sexes had declined slightly to 40% and approximately 25% respectively. In terms of the foreign languages
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that were
studied in 1984, French accounted for 50%, followed distantly by German (20%) and Spanish (5%).
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the
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portion
proportion
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students learning French and German by 25% and 5% in 2007. In that order,
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Spanish experienced a two-fold increase reaching 10%.
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