With the recent improvements to internet , people can leave views or opinions on goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing , discuss both giving your own answer with example.
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platform
allow
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allowed
people
to leave views
or opinions on goods
or service
. The Fix the agreement mistake
services
people
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bussiness
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business
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apply
aspect
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aspects
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people
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due to
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we want to buy suitable
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are suitable
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, people
want to buy a new computor
and there many Correct your spelling
computer
brand
for us to choose Change to a plural noun
brands
and
we Change preposition
from and
didnt
know which brand is more suitable for us. In Correct your spelling
didn't
this
respect, this
is where the views
or opinions for
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of
people
come into rescue. As the people
have already bought the computor
, after they used it they will have Correct your spelling
computer
a
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apply
clearly
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clear
of
the Change preposition
about
computors
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computers
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according
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to
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apply
Thus
,we can follow their opinion
and find the most suitable brand for us which will lead us o
have a better buying experience.
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drawbcks
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drawbacks
views
or opinon
provided by customers may not be correct. As we all knowCorrect your spelling
opinion
opinions
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people
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opinion
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people
see their opinions , they may have basis
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for
try
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trying
it
by Correct pronoun usage
them
theirselves
. Correct your spelling
themselves
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,
sell on store
. A Replace the word
sold in-store
people
who always need to put many things in her bags
will think the bags
is
so small. Change the verb form
are
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person
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are
Therefore
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person
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product
means
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mean
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they
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prevent
for
choosing the suitable Change preposition
from
prodicts
for us.
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products
To sum up
, leaving the views
or opinion
of the Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
goods
or services is a double edge ward. It will cause benefits and drawbacks at the same time.Thus
, we can't over relay
the Add a hyphen
over-relay
opinion
on the internet.We need to have our own viewa
in order to choose the best Correct your spelling
views
view
goods
for ourselves.Submitted by asllchkied on
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