The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The line graph compares the mean number of films casted in a film hall each year, according to 3 age groups.

The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares the mean number of films casted in a film hall each year, according to 3 age groups.
The graph illustrates the changes in
movies
seen a theaters by age group from 18 to 65 years old.
Overall
, there is a great difference between 2000 and 2015.
It is clear that
the
movies
seen in a theatre occurred during the period. In 2000 the number of
movies
seen in theaters for
ages
18-24 was 10
movies
, and it went up slowly to 12
movies
for
ages
24-44 years, the significant increase can be observed in
ages
45-65 it was 16
movies
. As can be seen, in 2005 number of
movies
seen in theatres by
ages
18-and 25 increased to reach 12
movies
, and
then
the
ages
of 25-and 44 watching
movies
in theaters decreased slightly to 10
movies
, steady in the
ages
45-65
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shown upward movement to become 14
movies
. As shown, in 2010 the number of
movies
seen in theatres for the
ages
of 18-24 remained stable compared to 2005, and
then
for the
ages
of 25-44 it decreased dramatically to become 6
movies
, and
then
the
ages
between 45-65 seen
movies
in a theatre rose up to reach 15
movies
. From an
overall
perspective, it is obvious that there are several differences between
ages
18-24, 25-44 and 45-65.
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