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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Given are the maps depicting some striking changes at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005. As is illustrated in the maps, by 2005 there were several new developments that showed an improvement
to
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 amenities and reflected new trends in the town. By 2005,main improvements had been made to the houses and roads.
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, one of the main advancements of the town seemed to be the new airlines.In 2005, the north apex of the resort and
left
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the left
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 side of the river were used for the new living apartments. In 1990,
west
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the west
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 side of the river and an area under the 2 crossing roads were houses which by 2005 had been cleared to make a huge supermarket. In 1990, the north-west area of the resort which was near
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the sea was full of small apartments and by 2005, there had been constructed multi-storey houses
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. In 2005, the north-eastern part of the urban area had significant developments
such
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 as
factory
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a factory
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 and a new stretch of railway running directly west.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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