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ome university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#ome #university #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualification
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Some would argue that Becherlar Degree
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 should have extra
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 in other
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 others think
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essential to focus and prepare to pass their college exams.
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, I believe that learning only one speciality
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 not enough,
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 need to attend more general
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. Learning about only one subject would not let the
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 gain all the
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 they need in their lives people who studied and focused on their speciality only do not have a lot of experience, an older brother can not guide his siblings studying a different
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 than him and the reason is the lack of
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 that he has.
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, a study by Hail Univesity showed that 36% of
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 need to improve in basic life requirements.I believe that
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 must not give all of their time
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 a single speciality.
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,
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 who want to gain more general
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 are planning to attend
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their
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 plus more basic
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 or workshops. By increasing
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 to
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students
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 will end up helping the community to be more educated.
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, medical
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 need to understand more about leadership because they are the smartest people in the community.I agree with
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 idea and the reason is we need more talented people and by increasing the general
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 of the community we will achieve it . In conclusion, studying only one subject is not as
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 as studying multiple
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.I believe that universities need to allow the
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 to attend different
classes
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Improve the logical flow of the essay by organizing your points more clearly. Use paragraphing effectively to separate different ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction outlines both perspectives clearly and sets up the thesis statement effectively.
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Develop your main points more comprehensively with clear explanations and relevant, specific examples.
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Address any grammatical errors and ensure that your sentences are clear and concise. This will improve the readability and effectiveness of your argument.
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You have a clear understanding of both perspectives regarding the topic, which shows a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and the main points discussed in the essay.

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