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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table data provide information
of
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 the consumption and manufacture of
potatoes
 in 5 parts of
world
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the world
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 in 2006.
Overall
,
Asia
 was the major
potatoes
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potato
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 producer
while
average
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the average
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 European
ate
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rate
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 was higher than citizens of other countries. In 2006,
an
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the
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 average intake of
the
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apply
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European was
96.1kilograms
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96.1 kilograms
, which was higher than the other regions. North
American
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America
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 stood in
the
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second place, with 57.8
kilograms
potatoes
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of potatoes
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consumption
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. Despite
Asia
was
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 the highest accumulation, its intake
only
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 25.8
kilograms
 per person. The stockpile in Africa was the least, nearly 14
kilograms
 per person
while
 it was 23.6
kilograms
 in South and Central America. 
Furthermore
, Asian countries manufactured over 131
tons
 of
potatoes
 which was the greatest number
of
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 the table and
significant
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 higher than South and Central America and Africa, just 15.6
tons
 and 16.4
tons
. Europe, producing 126.3
tons
potatoes
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of potatoes
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,
disparitiy
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disparity
disparities
 with
Asia
 by 5
tons
 and
also
 stood at second position. It was
clearly
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 that
Asia
 and Europe
was
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were
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 the principal
producer
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producers
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, asia, kilograms, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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