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The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons

The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons
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The pie chart compares the number of British undergraduates at one university in England who were bilingual in 2000 and 2010 .
Overall
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 , It is clearly seen that the figures of the students who were able to speak Spanish
in addition
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 remained the highest in both years . And
also
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 the number of those who speak only
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 increased in the latter year .
Firstly
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, The proportions of students who speak two other languages and those who speak German only did not change in the given years .
However
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 , the percentage of Spanish speakers rose significantly by 5% in 2010 .
Furthermore
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 , the number of one-language speakers grew from 15% to 20 % in 2010 .
On the other hand
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 , students'
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 related to those who speak both
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 and French declined by 5% in 2010 .
As well as
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 those who only speak
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 , their percentage decreased massively by 10 % in 2010 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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