In most successful organizations, some people believe that communications between managers and workers is important, other people said that other factors are more important. What is your opinion?

There is no denying the fact that there are many factors that make an
organization
succeful
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successful
. Whilst some argue that
communication
in workplaces is important, some think that there are other elements that outweigh it.
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about the importance of
communication
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not
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when there is a lack of
communication
between managers and their
workers
.
To begin
with,
communication
is key to
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organization
.
Workers
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be able to understand each other. And when there are
missunderstandings
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misunderstandings
in a workplace, it is most probably the reason a
business
goes downhill.
For instance
, when my friend's family started their family
business
, there was no
communication
between her father and uncle which caused the
business
to shut down. Another thing to consider, when there is a lack of
communication
in a workplace, it mostly means that
workers
and managers are not completely comfortable with each other, which may cause a type on tension between
workers
.
Furthermore
, it may cause a huge amount of people to quit. A friendly atmosphere is another reason
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a
succefull
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successful
business
.
For example
, when my brother got a part-time job, he quit a week
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because he could not handle the
invironment
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environment
and lack of
communication
. In conclusion, despite the different opinions people may have about how an
organization
can be
succeful
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successful
, I believe that we can all agree that a communicative
organization
, is a healthy and
succeful
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successful
organization
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication channels
  • collaboration
  • productivity
  • workplace harmony
  • issue resolution
  • escalate
  • organizational culture
  • motivation levels
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • feedback mechanisms
  • performance evaluations
  • fairness
  • transparency
  • criteria
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