The pie charts below show the changes in the percentage of people taking different courses at a college in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pie charts give information about the percentage of students registering for different courses at a College in Canada in the years 2000 and 2006. coverall, In 2000, medical technology made up the highest

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in the college,

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geodetic engineering was the smallest

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, In 2006, Civil Engineering became the target superset

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in that period and the lowest was made by the pharmacy

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. In 2000, chemical engineering

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course

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increased slightly by 1% only in 2006.

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, civil engineering was 15% in 2000

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and grew significantly to 27% after six years.

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, mechanical engineering

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quickly a approximately 9% in 2006.

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, Geodetic engineering made up 8% of majors and these figures rose moderately to 10%. whilst , medical technology

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was 21% in 2000 , and decreased considerably to half in 2006.

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,pharmacy major accounted for 7% , and

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down rapidly in the second period which was in 2006 .

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

158 words

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