The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided graph compares the total
number
of
books
read by 2 genders at Burnaby Public Library in a period of 3 years from 2011 to 2014.
Overall
,
men
read more and more
books
throughout the years and
women
's interest in reading had a decline near the end of the period. In 2011, there were only around 3000
books
read by
men
,
meanwhile
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women
read almost 5000 of them. In the next year, the
number
of
books
read by both genders increased, 4000
books
by
men
and 8000
books
by
women
. In 2013,
a
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significant growth was seen in
men's
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category,
there
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were 10000
books
.
Women
also
rose steadily to the same
number
of
books
read by
men
.
However
,
at the end
of the period in 2014,
men
's
number
of
books
grew to 14000,
meanwhile
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the
number
for
women
dropped to half of
men
's total
number
.
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