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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph compares the total
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 of
books
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 read by 2 genders at Burnaby Public Library in a period of 3 years from 2011 to 2014.
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,
men
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 read more and more
books
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 throughout the years and
women
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's interest in reading had a decline near the end of the period. In 2011, there were only around 3000
books
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 read by
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,
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women
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 read almost 5000 of them. In the next year, the
number
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 of
books
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 read by both genders increased, 4000
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 by
men
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 and 8000
books
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 by
women
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. In 2013,
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significant growth was seen in
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men's
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the men's
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 category,
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 were 10000
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.
Women
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also
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 rose steadily to the same
number
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 of
books
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 read by
men
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.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the period in 2014,
men
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's
number
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 of
books
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 grew to 14000,
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 the
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 for
women
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 dropped to half of
men
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's total
number
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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